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Key: DAF-18
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Status: closed
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Source: Object Management Group ( Andrew Watson)
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Summary:
Some english language corrections in sysa/14-11-01:
1. Section 0.3 (PDF p12) "constitutes of five major elementary" -> "consists of five major elementary".
2. Section 1 (PDF page 15) "methodology of the dependability argumentation" -> "methodology for the dependability argumentation". Also "integrating the conventional system assurance approach" -> "integrating conventional system assurance approaches". Also "as we are not experts of other systems" -> "as the authors are not experts in other systems".
3. Section 2 (PDF page 15) "the clause" -> "clause" (2 places).
4. Section 3 (PDF page 15) "following normative document contains" -> "following normative documents contain".
5. PDF page 21 ""composed by" -> "composed of" (6 places)
6. PDF page 24 "system of systems of system" -> "system or system of systems"
7. References to "SPEM2" (10 places) should be references to "SPEM 2.0".
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Reported: DAF 1.0b1 — Thu, 5 Feb 2015 17:44 GMT
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Disposition: Resolved — DAF 1.0
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Disposition Summary:
The wording is to be fixed
As for the comment 1, DAF 1.0b1 has no section 0, so it is no longer relevant.
As for the comments 2 to 7, we would like to agree to revise them as you suggested.
1. Section 0.3 (PDF p12) "constitutes of five major elementary" -> "consists of five major elementary".
2. Section 1 (PDF page 15) "methodology of the dependability argumentation" -> "methodology for the dependability argumentation". Also "integrating the conventional system assurance approach" -> "integrating conventional system assurance approaches". Also "as we are not experts of other systems" -> "as the authors are not experts in other systems".
3. Section 2 (PDF page 15) "the clause" -> "clause" (2 places).
4. Section 3 (PDF page 15) "following normative document contains" -> "following normative documents contain".
5. PDF page 21 ""composed by" -> "composed of" (6 places)
6. PDF page 24 "system of systems of system" -> "system or system of systems"
7. References to "SPEM2" (10 places) should be references to "SPEM 2.0". -
Updated: Tue, 22 Dec 2015 15:04 GMT