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DAF — Assorted english language corrections

  • Key: DAF-18
  • Status: closed  
  • Source: Object Management Group ( Andrew Watson)
  • Summary:

    Some english language corrections in sysa/14-11-01:

    1. Section 0.3 (PDF p12) "constitutes of five major elementary" -> "consists of five major elementary".

    2. Section 1 (PDF page 15) "methodology of the dependability argumentation" -> "methodology for the dependability argumentation". Also "integrating the conventional system assurance approach" -> "integrating conventional system assurance approaches". Also "as we are not experts of other systems" -> "as the authors are not experts in other systems".

    3. Section 2 (PDF page 15) "the clause" -> "clause" (2 places).

    4. Section 3 (PDF page 15) "following normative document contains" -> "following normative documents contain".

    5. PDF page 21 ""composed by" -> "composed of" (6 places)

    6. PDF page 24 "system of systems of system" -> "system or system of systems"

    7. References to "SPEM2" (10 places) should be references to "SPEM 2.0".

  • Reported: DAF 1.0b1 — Thu, 5 Feb 2015 17:44 GMT
  • Disposition: Resolved — DAF 1.0
  • Disposition Summary:

    The wording is to be fixed

    As for the comment 1, DAF 1.0b1 has no section 0, so it is no longer relevant.

    As for the comments 2 to 7, we would like to agree to revise them as you suggested.

    1. Section 0.3 (PDF p12) "constitutes of five major elementary" -> "consists of five major elementary".
    2. Section 1 (PDF page 15) "methodology of the dependability argumentation" -> "methodology for the dependability argumentation". Also "integrating the conventional system assurance approach" -> "integrating conventional system assurance approaches". Also "as we are not experts of other systems" -> "as the authors are not experts in other systems".
    3. Section 2 (PDF page 15) "the clause" -> "clause" (2 places).
    4. Section 3 (PDF page 15) "following normative document contains" -> "following normative documents contain".
    5. PDF page 21 ""composed by" -> "composed of" (6 places)
    6. PDF page 24 "system of systems of system" -> "system or system of systems"
    7. References to "SPEM2" (10 places) should be references to "SPEM 2.0".

  • Updated: Tue, 22 Dec 2015 15:04 GMT