IEFRA2 — Awkward Sentence Structure

4.1.1 Awkward Sentence Structure in Opening Statement
"Defense-in-depth solutions that address a wide range of…" is wordy and slightly awkward. The phrase "delivering Defense-in-depth solutions" sounds unclear—is IEF implementing security or defining a structure for it?

Sentence: "The IEF defines a framework for delivering Defense-in-depth solutions that address a wide range of information-sharing and safeguarding requirements."
Suggest: "The IEF defines a Reference Architecture for implementing Defense-in-Depth strategies that support secure and controlled information sharing across a wide range of operational environments."