IEFRA2 — Spelling and Grammar

2.2 Spelling & Grammar Issues:
(1) Sentence: "Numerous after-action and news reports on events such as SARS, the 2007 London subway bombing, the 1998 Ice Storm (Eastern Canada and Northern New York State), Haiti, Afghanistan, Katrina, and 9/11 events have documented the challenges faced by even the most technologically advanced agencies to effectively and efficiently interoperate with partners."
Suggest: "interoperate" may be unclear and sounds a bit "techy"; consider "interact or collaborate" instead.
(2) Sentence: "Each participating agency requires the ability to establish pre-planned, rapid, or ad hoc
ISS capabilities to enable:"
Suggest: "pre-planned" I think in this context is redundant phrase; I would suggest just "planned"
instead.
Sentence: "They do not apply policies/rules to the content of individual information elements or provide Defense-in-depth, i.e., layering safeguards based on the value of critical data elements (e.g., security and privacy tags) within the information element."
Suggest: "Defense-in-depth" should be "defense-in-depth" (lowercase 'd') or if we are going for an acronym, Defense-In-Depth (DiD).
(3) Sentence: "SLt. Delisle has admitted that selling secret information to the Russians over a 4 ½-year period jeopardizes Canada’s ability to protect itself and its standing with key partner nations. Canadian officials concede they do not know precisely what SLt. Delisle gave the Russians between 2007 and 2011."
Suggest: "do not know precisely" is awkward phrasing; consider "do not know exactly". Here are the subtle differences:
"do not know precisely" Implies a degree of accuracy or detail is missing and suggests that some information is known, but not at a fine-grained level.
"do not know exactly" Implies that the information is either known or completely unknown and it expresses a more binary meaning —either you have the exact information or you don’t.
(4) Sentence: "Decision-makers worldwide are seeking new and innovative ways to balance the requirement to share information and simultaneously protect sensitive data assets."
Suggest: "new and innovative" I think in this situation the "new" is redundant with innovative. ; "innovative" is sufficient. But, what I think you are saying is something like this: "both novel adaptations and groundbreaking innovations as ways to …